On the Joy of Writing 360 Degree Sentences with Li-Young Lee and T.S. Eliot
On the Joy of Writing 360 Degree Sentences with Li-Young Lee and T.S. Eliot
Thomas, the crab
grows old he
grows old
comes scuttling
meek every week
to a room full
of women
and plants himself
properly
measures everything
for the scope
of afternoon tea
while whispers waft
harried as fleas
chased by swatters—
they do not
want him there,
and this proves first
impressions
are often correct,
because to resist such
tsunamis will make
a man into sushi
toppings—for God’s
destination
ever was a child’s,
and God’s
elastic mind
lets me start over
when peaches
fall from the bag
and the blossoms
are gone.
Li-Young Lee,
why interpret joy in this
failure and decay,
with darkness rising at
every passing step,
fear collecting
as light through
the nimble stitches
of dust—don’t you shake,
and tremble,
thus etherized?
Thomas, such words,
seeming unfortunate
fortunate, do not
tell truth
and only point—sir,
I can no more drink
the word water
than feel the word
fear, but when I
sprawl on a pin,
wriggle on a wall,
words are always there,
as when pulling
the last crop of cabbage—
the ground was cold,
my feet so warm,
and I planned
something for mother—
and ask me where
was I Thomas—
was the truth
in those words, or
was I making it up
for you riding
the back of your crab
“Mr. Prufrock”
in a salon
in London with uppity
women who will not
sing to either of us
talking
of Michelangelo
to put us off?
Li-Young Lee your point
is well received,
perhaps I should
modify my beliefs.
Thomas, your wit
is amazing.
Lee—You really think so?
Don’t take my word for it—
everywhere you look,
in ten-thousand directions,
you untangle long locks
and need no answer
from me—flow
and making return,
the fruit of Eden
rots in the ear
of listening night
bending down
to hear your lost childhood,
struck like a lantern’s
match gone out,
leaving a fixed mark
that will move
with the coming
of the waters—
my gaze to cloud
the computer screen
dividing the room
where she undresses,
the bottoms
of her trousers
rolled, sucking
on a peach.
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This poem has so many moving pieces, it’s one I’d have to sit with for a while to filly experience. On first read, though, I feel like you truly captured the evocative voice of Eliot. Love this piece!
you HAVE to keep going with this… series/suite/seance
er- whatever you’re considering it/them
will make an incredible collection!
I second.
This series is full of the good.
You are mining something about time and poetry and self.
Lexpomo June gold.
All the credit goes to how Linda’s eyes popped out like crystal spheres when I said some names and Philip Levine for his columnar form style. All the credit is hers!
I love all the Prufrock and how you started with the I grow old, I grow old and came back to the trousers being rolled and a peach at the end.
🙂
measuring his life out in tea cups.
(since reading your wonderful series
I’ve been thinking of T. S. & Tom Becket.
(the 2 toms)
whom Eliot met more than
metaphysically .with Murder
In the Cathedral,
and his response to the 4th tempter
the last temptation is the greatest treason
to do the right thing for the wrong reason.)
Love these channelings, Manny. (I guess if you can channel Eliot, the sky’s the limit.) Interesting about Linda’s attraction to Levine. I like him too—although his non-columnar “They Feed They Lion” is the one poem of his that sticks with me.
Continuing to love this series! After all it’s “founder.”
Loving all of the references here and the feedback adding additional references. One reference that occurred to me was the many time John Cage did something like “Writing through Finnegan’s Wake.”