Antrim Coast Haibun
Close as a backyard garden, the desk at the corner of a long room, you can almost touch the Irish Sea on the train from Coleraine to Derry. Surging layers of white on white. A swerve and we’re barreling towards farmhouse, cliff and church, past Castlerock and Bellarena and into a double black tunnel. The train wobbles and jolts away from the sea. A shaggy raven alights on driftwood. Downhill Station is brown-beige and six shades of green. Blue-pink horizon, one farm after another and another. Through the dark hedges,
raven clears a path. Makes room
for the blind man’s cane.
A grandmother with a pixie-cut the color of milk. Her lips curled in a half-smile. She knits — black angora interlaced with pink spangles — in lockstep with the train’s rhythmic wobble. Her granddaughter twirls the skien’s long tail. Across from them two brothers talk about yesterday’s bombing at Guildhall Square. The work of unorganized ruffians, they hypothesize.
“Much less trouble since they built the Peace Bridge over the River Foyle,” says the youngest. He offers a copy of The Sentinel to the grandmother, who has quit knitting to stare at the restless incoming tides. “I think of a giant origami when I cycle over the bridge. It’s like I’m flying through a strand of DNA.”
After war you hear
young brothers chattering
while folding paper. Songs.
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In the phone version of this the first line of the haiku appears to be center causing the haiku to zig-zag. It’s supposed to read like a traditional haiku.
that second haiku made my tearduct wobble. 🙂
Living with Irish friars now, this gives an added context. The form is elegant, and I wonder if our friend Pamela Campbell might find this intriguing, given her American Sentences set on a train…
Beautiful work, Linda!
It is a form I am just learning. Linda presents an incredible example!
This is incredible.
I felt like I was there.
Beautifully rendered scene. You have that reporter’s eye for story and the poet’s sensibility that pulls me in
An amazing narrative and yet so lyrical. It pulled me in and never let me go. I’m still thinking about it. Thank you, Linda!
Terrific use of the form. You give us the context, then nail us right in the forehead with those exquisite haiku. You go, girl.
lovely Lindy
So much to like here. As I mentioned to Greg above:
It is a form I am just learning. You present an incredible example!
Love:
Through the dark hedges,
raven clears a path. Makes room
for the blind man’s cane.
and
After war you hear
young brothers chattering
while folding paper. Songs.
This is a descriptive marvel.
The train carries the readers through the beautiful north of Ireland, While the form is intricate, it never interferes with the narrative.
Beautiful description.