Sometimes, A Poem
is that cranky old man
brandishing his cliched cane
his curse-blasting ambience
suspendered pants riding his ribs
hair a white brushfire
yammering over his precious lawn
when all you want to do
is lie on the healing green
in the quixotic rain
swoon the hymning birds
and let your bones soak
sweet into the deep earth
For that rainy part of Pat Owen
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Lovely, and funny. I may or may not resemble some specific parts of this!
Love this. You’ve captured that cranky old man so well.
What a fun personification 🙂
Sylvia, I read this and the man, the lawn, and the person at the end, reminded me of a story, it had to be true, that I wrote and posted today…
Great images. The last six lines are so soothing and healing. Love “quixotic rain swoon the hymning birds.”
Oh my, this is really inventive! What a great metaphor for writing!
love this response to the title
Fav lines: All!
Gorgeous language in this!
white brushfire/ yammering is precious lawn
I meant “yammering over his precious lawn”
These sometimes poems are riveting with your images, language and story! Love them!
Great words in this, Sylvia – yammering, cliched cane, quixotic rain . . .
The suspendered pants reminded me of my grandsons who torture us with imitating low-rider pants (or no-rider, even). I’m tryng to encourage high rider pants for my sanity!
Thank you for honoring my earlier poem
I enjoyed the humor and the gorgeous images in this poem.
I love “kickstart” poems — the device of the title leading into the poem. Great images; wonderful progression through the poem. Were you channeling Walt Whitman? 😉
Beautiful! I love
“when all you want to do
is lie on the healing green
in the quixotic rain
swoon the hymning birds…”
What a great series you’ve got going on. Mess around and you’ll have a book on your hands.
Sylvia, hi! This poem really touched me, not only due to being so well written, but due to early in our marriage, at our first home in Danville, such an old man lived right across the street, but even so obtrusively came over twice to mow OUR lawn!
I love thinking of the contrast between your quiet gentle self and the loud directness of this poem
‘and let your bones soak
sweet into the deep earth” Beautiful closing!
Love this poem., and love the series !!!!