4. Komorebi: Osore
A deepening green wildness of overwhelming possibilities.
Fear trembles, remembers, resembles lightenment.
Day begins to heat the sky as we enter the forest
by way of the latched and faded vermillion gate,
There is a trail here made of cast off cedar slabs
and red lava rock. It’s raining and poisonous mists
have ascended and seep into the garden from
the creek. There is fear in these woods, it arrived
the moment we stepped in. Knowing this, then
being ready for it is not the same. A rain-slicked oak
leaf, a face, a terrible peering gaze has always known
all of our thoughts. Every painting ever seen in safety
praised into one glistening image. Frozen and sinking
into whatever —shock— could ever hope to raise. Startled
into the visible from cool wet air and light, the fading
chaotic vision of some flight or fight terror reveals
truth in reflection. We have seen our real face. Dervishing
dust falls, then swims. The gathering of melted dreams.
On the surface of this glazed mirror is the ire of stars.
We grasp at marvel, at splendor. A wet-cold finger traces
the dusty bevel before we plunge in. A myriad of mysteries
the dusty bevel before we plunge in. A myriad of mysteries
unfold, unveil a grand forever. In the revealing though,
is the leaving. When you are gone, please remember
you were always perfect in my eyes. We sing everlasting
and did our best to reflect your light, always in secret.
In secret, we did our best.
Something does abide branching like grandmother’s hand
to shade from scorching and protect the young blue-green
Cohosh from blooming starfire.
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“Every painting ever seen in safety
praised into one glistening image” – whoah.
“We grasp at marvel, at splendor.” – the poem, the talent teasing it into being.
So many wonderful lines and moments. It’s a journey down the trail worth taking.
Thank you bill,
I had a feeling that #4 (fear)was going to be the most difficult.
Appropriate I guess. Thank you for investing with it. #5 (twighlight) is done as well and that’s the final.
Thanks again for walking along.
Wow! What a journey your poem maps. Such rich detail, Coleman.
“A myriad of mysteries
unfold, unveil a grand forever. In the revealing though,
is the leaving. When you are gone, please remember
you were always perfect in my eyes.”
Stunning in every way!
Thank you as well H.A. for hanging in with this poem…..its been a ride. 😊
I love the opening haiku and the ending tanka, both linenated the Japanese way! Describing the fear of being seen in the forest’s eyes really works. The poem is layered with shadow and light.
Thank you ❤️ yeah you know how this one tried to run 🤪 thanks 😊
yes, always in secret.
❤️
There’s a cryptid mysticism to this that I really love. The sounds here are great from the opening haiku and “trembles, remembers, resembles…”
Thank you Shaun. For seeing, and for writing.
This is a feast, Coleman. The ire of stars… get outta here!
Lol…..I was waiting for you to see it.
Thank you so much for your help with this. I was so twisted around and your gentle axing unstuck it.
❤️
So many layers!
Shifting on their own cognizance.
Thank you.
Thank-you for the comment Bud, yes.
The heading for this one is fear so I was trying to build it like that.
It got beyond me (again very likely appropriate) and I had to ask for help. It will probably need to be cleaned up before it goes in, however if you can see the layering as it is I will attempt not to mess it up. Thanks again. 😊
the many different nuances of this poem remind me of a Gothic piece, well done!
Thank you linda 😀 it’s part of a longer poem that has taken a couple of weeks. Whew ! Its completed now.
Echo all the good comments before me.
Especially, love this many layered beauty:
“Dervishing
dust falls, then swims. The gathering of melted dreams.
On the surface of this glazed mirror is the ire of stars.”
Thanknyou Pam 😀 your eye for the layers means a lot to me.
What an outstanding poem.
Startled
into the visible from cool wet air and light, the fading
chaotic vision of some flight or fight terror reveals
Yikes! That’s some serious craftsmanship.
E.E. thank you for commenting. This one took some work. I will be posting the ending for the renga tomorrow. Whew.
What a magnificent journey—from “wildness of overwhelming possibilities” through fear, revelation, and the ache of memory. The “latched and faded vermillion gate,” “poisonous mists,” and “the ire of stars” make for a world that’s as mythic as it is intimate. The movement from fear to marvel, the act of reflection—literal and figurative—grounds the poem, but it’s the tenderness of the ending, that secret, faithful love, that truly lingers. “Branching like grandmother’s hand”—such a striking, comforting image.
Thank-you for the wonderful reading of this. I really appreciate it. Thank you Dana 😊