Outage
maybe I’d be happy
if I could only eat raspberries,
pinkish-red, tart, sticky-sweet
soft fruit skin bubbles
becoming tiny hats
dancing on playful fingers
under a setting sun
in the distance
where neighborhood kids gather
at dark for a game of manhunt
after the power goes out
for the third time this week
and everyone emerges from their homes
to make small talk with neighbors they barely know
to stave off loneliness
to press through the heat
of another summer passing by
15 thoughts on "Outage"
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The high-def presence of the fruit at the beginning that hold the promise of happiness (“ fruit skin bubbles becoming tiny hats dancing on playful fingers” yes!) leading us to a forced mingling of neighbors, hinting at a happiness beyond comfort. Nice!
Thanks, Bud! Yeah, happiness beyond comfort is key for this poem. Thanks for reading!
I agree with Bud — excellent description. I feel the heat and am on the streets with your neighbors during the outage .
Thank you, Lee! Glad to have you join us in this poem!
I like how the feels going down the page. I love the title. There’s light depression in the poem with the words manhunt, loneliness and the power going out
Thank you, Linda! I always appreciate your kind words. Glad you liked this one.
My favorite poem of yours this month! Well done.
Thanks, Kevin! I am glad you enjoyed this one so much.
Feels so true, and love the touch of humor with the tiny raspberry hats! Lovely.
Thanks, Bill! The raspberry harlts had to be part of it. My niece used to laugh uncontrollably when I did that. Thanks for reading!
*hats
Like the how the title speaks of power loss ‘outage’ and power found ‘out’side (“neighbors they barely know”).
Adore: “soft fruit skin bubbles/becoming tiny hats/dancing on playful fingers”
Thanks, Pam! I appreciate your kind words. So glad you liked this one.
I love how the tone here moves from light (“becoming tiny hats”) to luminous and big–“to make small talk with neighbors they barely know/to stave off loneliness…” Shew!
Thank you, Shaun. I appreciate that you feel/see the shift in weight with this poem. Thanks for reading!