Bearing Witness on the Subway Platform
it’s quiet for a Monday morning
but the city streets still bustle with life and purpose
a gentle breeze touseled my hair
I take one last look at the sky–
the way my grandmother used to instruct me before heading underground–
and descend the subway stairs
the downtown F is running on time
or so the illuminated sign says
an uptown train arrives on the platform behind me
the doors open with a tired thud,
already exhausted before the rush begins
and people spill onto the platform
I don’t hear pontificators’ earnest declarations
I don’t hear children’s cries
I don’t hear teenage bursts of laughter
I don’t hear “IT’S SHOW TIME!” –nah, it’s too early for that
and when I turned to watch the train pull from the platform
I saw a man dressed too plain for work
too clean to be from here
too distinct to be anything more than an ordinary stranger
he was the only passsenger left in the car
he sat in silent contemplation
stony fluorescence surrounded him like a halo of Uncreated Light
I furrowed my brow in curiosity and threw him the classic New York chin nod
a sign of respect
he covered his heart with one hand
and lifted three fingers on the other
I stifled a silent laugh,
I smirked and gave him a wink with my oculus sinister
to let him know, I know…
and that I am not and cannot ever be fully pure or sure
he closed his eyes and nodded in understanding
stand clear of the closing doors, please
**bee boo**
the train doors close
and he glides away smoother than steps on water’s surface
I turn and face the dirty tile wall
I lean too close to the platform’s edge and peek into the tunnel
I search the darkness
I search the darkness
I watch for the light, a sign that the train approaches
I want to know when mine will come
I wait to be a passenger
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What a tender, intriguing poem. H.A., thank you for sharing them with us this month. I’ll miss them.
Thanks Karen! It has been a delight to read your work. I just LOVE what you do with the erasure form. Wow! I have to give it a go. You’ve inspired me.
This is lovely and thought-provoking… your detail brought such visceral memories of my years riding that exact train daily, and the whole NYC embodied experience.
Thank you! So glad to stir up a few good memories. The F train is extra special for me. Thanks for reading!
Beautiful. Strangers on a train, connecting in the subtlest of ways, but connecting. It gives me hope. Thanks for being such a wonderful writer and colleague this month.
Thank you, Kevin! I appreciate that you read and responded to a variety of my poems this month. It’s has been great to read yours as well. I loved creating, writing, and connecting with you this month, too.
love how the line “and he glides away smoother than steps on water’s surface” reminds of Jesus walking on the Sea of Galilee
Thanks, Gaby! I appreciate that you caught the reference. It’s funny, there are lots of dudes who look like Jesus on the subway. 😆 It’s even more fun when they know it and play along in these random exchanges with strangers.
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Thanks, Coleman! Glad you like this one.
I love poems that capture little moments, and love the ending on this too. Thanks for sharing this month!
Thanks, Chelsea! I am glad you liked this one. Thanks for reading this one and others this month.
Chelsie*
Sorry. Autocorrect is the worst!
Thanks for bringing that New York style into our lives! I have so enjoyed reading your work this June. Stay well – until next year!
Thanks, Sylvia! I am glad you enjoyed the poems this month. Wishing you a beautiful summer. See you next June!
Your love affair with New York continues. It’s a great poem. You respectfully treat the characters you come across, like the man on the subway. New York is a city with billions of stories, many of which I know you tell. Great LexPoMo!
Thanks, Lee! I am a born-and-raised New Yorker. I’ve lived in every borough except Staten Island. I’ve lived on Long Island and currently in the Hudson Valley. It’s definitely home. My love for it only grows. I made my way to LexPoMo by a generous invitation from a graf school friend and colleague. It’s been a joy!
Thank you for reading and for leaving such encouraging and rich feedback. I’ve enjoyed your writing all month,too.
*grad school
This is lovely, and your words make it so easy for me to see the scene. Eye contact is surely underrated in our world!
Thanks, Nancy! I am glad you enjoyed this one. Yes, eye contact is deeply underrated in today’s world. Thank you so much for reading.
“Bearing witness” is a wonderful story. You take us through each moment with delicacy- an unusual description for the subway. “He glides away smoother than steps on water’s surface” is powerful.
Thank you, Virginia! New York, while historically and notoriously tough and gritty, has some solid human interactions. Many of which are kind, gentle, humorous, and even tender. This might surprise some folks. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Have a beautiful summer!
I grew up in Philadelphia and feel the same way about the city of my birth, even as a Kentucky transplant. I wish you a beautiful summer.
Fantastic! I LOVE Philly! What a great city. One of my favorites. Hope you have a gorgeous summer, too.
Love how you take us there with sound and image, especially: “stand clear of the closing doors, please/**bee boo** ”
and into the many stories the train and platform holds!
I’ve enjoyed the conversations around your poems and others and mine that your thoughtful comments provoke.
Thank you, Pam! I, too, have thoroughly enjoyed your writing this month. I do hope you plan to put all of those thought-provoking works in a large collection. The Library of Congress should have a copy as well. Just sayin’.
Thank you for reading and for your kind comments/encouragement for my (and others’) poems all June. Have a gorgeous summer!
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See you next year…or perhaps on a platform entering or exiting “stand clear of the closing doors, please/**bee boo** ”
I will know you by your picture and you will know me when I manage to holler a hello in 17 syllables!
Yeees!!!😎🤘🏻🖤
Such a rich poem today and very well-composed! I’ve enjoyed your work and so appreciate the care with which you responded to mine and others’ work.
Thank you, Bud! I am glad you liked this last one. I appreciate your kindness and encouragement all month. Your writing provides much inspiration! Enjoy your summer. Thanks for reading.
Love how you capture the “magic” and the surreal in the mundane places and everyday people.
Another great one, Lady.
Thank you, Joseph.
What a well-crafted poem! But these lines really shone:
I saw a man dressed too plain for work
too clean to be from here
too distinct to be anything more than an ordinary stranger
Every word pays its rent to be there.
Thank you, E.E.! It has been wonderful to read your creations and to receive such kind and helpful feedback from you. Have an excellent summer.
Great poem and the sound effect “bee boo” is priceless. Thanks for all your comments on my poems, I’m grateful to you for taking the time to read them.
Thank you, Bill! I have really enjoyed reading your work this summer. Your writing holds beauty and truth. Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my writing with such care, too. Happy summer!
I am going to miss reading your work! It’s been a pleasure to be in this community with you and your thoughtful work and comments. Here’s to more in the coming times ahead!
Many thanks, Shaun! I sincerely appreciate the time and care you put into reading and responding to my work. I really hope you choose poems you wrote this month and submit them EVERYWHERE!!! You are a talented and engaging poet. It’s been great to be part of this community with you, man!
What an impeccably crafted poem! H.A. this a stand-out in a month of stand-outs from you.
Your great writes have inspired and instructed me. Thank you for your comments. Be well till we meet again
Thank you so much, L.! I appreciate every comment you have left for me. Thank you for taking the time to read my poems. I sincerely appreciate it. It’s been great writing with you in this community! Have an excellent summer. See you next June!
Thank you for submitting your very well written poems and for your kind comments on my poems!
Thank you, John! I appreciate that you took the time to read and leave such kind feedback on my work. It was great to write with you and to read your work this month, too. Happy summer!