[Sundial in the garden]
Sundial in the garden
telling time
with a shadow—
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Sundial in the garden
telling time
with a shadow—
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Perfect form for this observation. The dash at the end makes it.
Thanks, Bill!
Kevin, I agree with Bill — that em dash at the end is a master stroke.
Thanks Jeremy!
A few poetic words that encompass great meaning.
I appreciate it, John!
there’s soft concession in the metrical balance (starting with a rising iamb, ending with a falling trochee) of “sundial” and “shadow,” the alliteration in line 2, the quietness of the indentation of line 3
Wow, Gaby, you are such a great analyst of poetry! I appreciate your appreciation of my music-making here.
Oooooh this one made me sigh aloud with something at the intersection of recognition-epiphany-lament.
Thanks, Lisa! That’s a high compliment. I’m humbled.
I admire the discipline in your work. The contradictions of such complexity in simple forms.
Thanks, Jules! I appreciate you and have loved seeing more of you recently. We need to get together for a Mike Flanagan Fest someday soon.
Time and shadows in a sunny garden are the juxtaposition I didn’t know I needed.
Thanks, Liz! I’m so looking forward to being with you and your friends at Valaterra this fall.
The simplicity packs depth here. I love it. Such a gorgeous image, too.
Thanks, H.A.!
People are already saying gorgeous and true words about this. I just can only bask in your words.
Thanks darlin! Tell Coleman that he helped pull me back toward haiku, just as I was beginning to move on from the form. I’m the Michael Corleone of haiku!
What a union of form and content. Your poem is the gnomen!
Thanks, Nancy!
captures the stillness of the observation
well done
Thanks Mike!
all of the above
& like time
the balance of the teeter-totter
Thanks Jim!
Oh! Telling time.
You are writing whole novels with one stroke of shade.
Bravo.
Thanks Coleman! Your insights on haiku might be sinking into my brain, finally.
Boom! Well done, especially:
telling time
with a shadow—
Thanks Pam!
A poem that does not
disturb the silence
from which it came
Nice!
Absolutely love the form of this, Kevin!
Thanks Sarah!
I love your ability to say something compelling with so few words.
Thanks, Wayne! Most of the credit should go to the form itself though. Have you ever tried haiku?
Love sundials – they carry the aura of ancient without the modern concept of “time.” Sundials seem to slow time while clocks and watches speed it up. PS The Shadow knows.
Agree, Sylvia!
Brilliant work!
Thanks Jazmine!
OK, you’re inspiring me with the haikus. Lovely poem!