Reprise Triolet
Scout bees sought the empty
first, signaled others to fill the space
in the hollow hive towers—a new colony
of scout bees sought the empty
hole where I’ve lost so much family.
The honey returned heady with grace.
Scout bees found the empty
first, a signal for others to fill the space.
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So impactful with so few different lines, awesome
Thanks for reading, McKenna! I’ll go check out your page.
I love where the bees lead us in this poem. And Ellen, you make this form look easy, though I know I would struggle with it.
Follow those bees! Forms really aren’t easy, but I love the scaffolding they provide. Thanks for reading, Nancy!
This was really cool to read!
Thanks for reading, Philip! I need to go check out your page. There are so many of us!
I love the way you use repetition and the end rhyme of the last two stanzas, compared with these taut lines!
Thanks, Shaun! That’s the form at work.
I taught Bees at a Camp Invention and love the scout bees!
The way you use their purpose here is breathtaking;
“of scout bees sought the empty
hole where I’ve lost so much family.
The honey returned heady with grace.”
Pam, your teaching experience sounds fun! “Camp Invention” is such a great name.
Gorgeous. You are so good with this form and the bees are your muses.
Thanks, E! Yes, they are.
Ellen,
Love the repetition, and the way it connects to
“the empty
hole where I’ve lost so much family.”
What a beauty of an image/idea: “The honey returned heady with grace.”
Thanks, Karen.
Yes!
hole where I’ve lost so much family.
Thank you, Roberta. We need a place to put our losses.