A gain again
A tough climb between
this noble thought and deed: not
eating after dark.
My best intent may fall to
the intense presence of one
and then just one more.
That one becomes another—
more morning regret.
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Love this experimentation with forms, haiku/couplet/haiku. Not to mention the title wordplay. Yummy.
Creative and real life!
Agree with Kevin on wordplay in the title. Love how the couplet links the 2 haiku. And agree with Linda: true and creative!
So much goes on the the haiku! Wonderful compression. A wise poem.
Wow! Such clever play on words and form. I like best– “best intent may fall to / the intense presence of one” — that “intent” to “intense” — that tug on our emotions, that leaves me rooting for you.
Agreed with the others here and I love how the form speaks to the piece, too!
Great work, as the others have noted–form and thought. SImplicity here!