A Moment after the Breakup
A group of us went
into that abandoned mine
in the low mountains west of Tucson,
crouched on all fours
down the length of the long shaft.
I was behind you, you didn’t realize —
I was always behind you —
when someone up front
started screaming about bats.
On they came, a river of bats
filling the narrow gap
between head and the jagged roof.
You shined your light up to see
the furred bodies, the leathered wings,
an endless stream, and started to laugh.
Not one touched my hair,
or brushed my skin as they passed overhead.
You turned back and saw me,
smiled that toothsome smile of yours —
I confess I fell in love again.
At the end of the shaft, an open room,
we could finally unbend ourselves,
see the marks from pick axe,
the crushed beer cans from prior expeditions.
We lingered in this small womb
beneath the desert, perfectly cool,
got baked, played the light
across each others’ faces,
all the while knowing our only way out
was back down that long tunnel,
the traverse we’d have to make
to be reborn as the people
we’d both come to hate.
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wow. what a scene you show
and the last lines
“reborn as the people
we’d both come to hate”!!!
I like the way it is explorative then explosive. And maybe no small thing is the use of the en dash. Perfect.
Oh that first verse is a beauty and the last verse with it’s surprise ending matches it. Another good poem from Bill. You are so consistent!
I love the surprise of
“You turned back and saw me,
smiled that toothsome smile of yours —
I confess I fell in love again.”
The poem was so safe for moment and I was expecting victory.
I agree with others, so pleasant & warm–then that surprize ending.
Intriguing poem. Love how you unfold the narrative, tiny half-scenes at a time. One of my favorite moments was:
You turned back and saw me,
smiled that toothsome smile of yours —
I confess I fell in love again.
And what a powerful, haunting ending.
Whoa, this is a great story, and well told!