American Sentence LXIII
A woman boards at dawn, extra heartbeat concealed under pencil skirt.
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A woman boards at dawn, extra heartbeat concealed under pencil skirt.
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Wow. “Extra heartbeat concealed…”
You provide us with an early morning puzzle. Even better than Wordle.
Powerful!
I went way abstract with the meaning behind the heartbeat before I understood. Once I did, wow, I love it and want to know where she’s going, who she is seeing, and if it’s also concealed to her. That’s a lot of story you’ve given me to wonder about after one sentence. Great work.
This packs an extra hefty punch. Brilliant!
The turn works so well: it gives the same punch as Hemingway’s shortest poem
This packs so much in 17 syllables!
The train gets crowded! But interesting, to be sure!!
Cleverly executed, and so much packed into one sentence!
OOOO–intriguing! I love this one.
One wonders if the poet knows something the woman does not. Nice job, Pam.