American Sentence LXXI
Dialed into the dog, the girl sees him tense before caboose floor creaks.
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Dialed into the dog, the girl sees him tense before caboose floor creaks.
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Love this condensed idea.
The essence of the moment perfectly captured.
Very efficient but perfectly dramatic!
Yes !
simple intrigue
from “dialed” to “creaks”
I love “dialed into the dog.” Those few words say much.
I love the spring of potential movement here–you left us at a tension.
What suspense and diction! You always make the seventeen syllables feel effortless.
Alliteration, and a new place on the train…you are the master of this art!