Another shooting at three a.m.
Snug in pink cashmere
Sunday morning, fresh-ground coffee
you share news of last night’s shooting
another one I slept through
lightning cracking
loud as thunder, you said loud
as a whip cracked right
outside the window loud
as the grinder loud as thunder
no sirens, just gunfire again
The gunfire woke you, woke J downstairs,
all alone who texted
But I, right by the window
shushing in the white-noise circular
rain rumbling repeating distant
belly-growl thunder I was shushing,
sleeping right through it again
loud as a whip, you said
bloody lightning richochettes
mourning doves scatter three a.m.
another shooting
And I, snug in fresh laundered sheets
I slept through it, lulled
rocking-chair dreams a sunny
windowsill a red Swedish horse
and a gate that opened to paradise
outside loud as a whip cracking
louder, even
but the dream, sunny with thunder
gunfire flashing beyond the purple hills
snug in pink cashmere
sipping fresh-ground coffee
9 thoughts on "Another shooting at three a.m."
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Incredible poem, especially love this bookending and all the gunfire/shooting/grinder in between.
Elaine, wow! Sound tells the story here so well. Excellent.
This might be the best use of repetition I’ve seen in a poem, simply because this tragedy. Keeps. Happening. Wish it didn’t have to be written, but you captured it well.
This poem so perfectly reflects society’s accustomed numbness to the senseless tragedy of gun-powered slaughter in our nation.
The form works so well in this poem where repitition is also a theme. Well done, Elaine!
I love the way this piece tells the story so clearly. The contrast between the calm/peaceful dream and the horrors happening outside was intricate and weaved together perfectly, great piece!
Yes, the repetition just reinforces your theme. Love the interwoven safety (snug in freshly laundered sheets), nature’s noise, and the gun episodes.
Hi, E!
Powerful poem! The vibrant (violent) sound imagery surrounding and breaking into your dream…wow.
I love the contrast of the dream vs. the harsh reality.