Aura
I wanted to say
life’s too short
to spend it
with miserable people
but gut-checked
my own aura,
plum and shades
of dull gray.
I’m not all doom
and gloom, I hope,
there are times
I eat the crisp green bean
straight off the bush,
laugh as the orange
spark races toward
the Black Cat
and write in yellow
across new snow,
my name,
as optimistically
as one can
under such conditions.
14 thoughts on "Aura"
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Don’t you eat that yellow snow.
I love how pared down this is. Just the essentials. Seriously, I love this poem. One of your best
Oh, thank you! That means a lot.
this does what a poem should
pathos
logos
ethos
and damn good humor
Thank you, Jim.
Damn it’s downright weird son talkin bout your junk on a Tuesday mornin in June but I like it!
Seriously, you had me from the starting gate – and this one was a delight. The beauty is you invite the levity and shoo away the asses, or somehow invite them in to surprise them.
A very big hearted poem. And brief!
Brief is good – I keep telling myself that!
I admire your economy and balance! How this poem lifts!
Thanks, Shaun!
like origami.
tight folds!
Kinda jealous of the ability to have accuracy in the snow. I especially love the black cat line- a mysterious but vivid detail. Love this one!
Enjoyed the humor and humility of this poem. The phrase “gut-checked my own aura” is great. Like Austen, I was a tiny bit confused on the orange spark and the Black Cat at first…but the caps helped. I think it’s a brand of fireworks?
I like the way this moves once it gets going. If it were my piem, I’d cut the first two stanzas.
Love the original imagery, Buddy. You boldly expose yourself (metaphorically speaking, of course). I see what Tom is talking about, and the poem definitely works that way. At the end of the day, though, your opinion is the one that counts.