Blessing & Bagle
I stopped __ ____ __ ___ _____
rolling ____ __ ___ ____,
_______ ____ ______
___ ______ ____ __
as it were _ _______.
______ ___ ______ __ ______,
____ __ _______ _____ __
____ ___, ________ __ _____,
___ _ _____ ______ _______ ____
___ rolling ____ ___ ____
head over heels , ___ _______ ________
after _______ ____ _ _____
___ strangely _____ ____ myself.
_ _______ in stillness.
I ____ _ ____
___ surrender ______
__ _ ____ ___ ________
____ __ ___ ___ __
to _____ __.
The ____ __ silent,
_ _____ ___ __,
blessing ______.
*A stacked erasure of ‘The Bagel’ and ‘Blessing Myself’
two poems by David Ignatow.
two poems by David Ignatow.
15 thoughts on "Blessing & Bagle"
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That’s killer! I love it Coleman – the compliment of the erasures. Break me! Hit me! Kill me!
reminds me of the tides.
the in and out,
and how they settle.
in between.
This has a very Zen feel. The erasure is an entirely new poem! The empty underlinings remind me of extended I-Ching messages. Love this!
Inspired to try this. Thanks!
I love this, Coleman! You never cease to amaze me with your explorations.
“I surrender to the silent blessing”
Gorgeous piece, Coleman!
Great
the spacing speaks,
totally
different without it
I love the empty underlinings. Stops me to savor each line.
I fear my poems all begin to sound alike, and then there is this. Terrific.
I love that you include the blank spaces so we can see its origins!
I really need to get into erasure poems! Good one
Creative and striking!
I really enjoyed this poem.
Impressive way to use erasure in this format. I like that you make something wholly new here. For example the idea that the speaker would “stop rolling over” themselves and surrender to “the silent blessing” is a good reminder that amid all the fawning and positivity of this particular environment, which is certainly pleasant, and needed (!), the real reason we are here is the magic of the word and the way we are drawn to its particular mellifluous torture and glee.
Jon , I love it that you got that.
I was trying to make the poem make sense in a completely different way.
In “the bagel” He just keeps rolling so I wanted to figure out qay to change it. And yes it really was a fun little kismet that the two poems stacked like they did. I tried some different stuff but when this one hit like it did…..awesomeingly awesome.
His work is fairly dark most of the time but he’s real about things.
Real good American poet.