Cake
That time we camped at Elephant Butte,
New Mexico. We thought we lucked
into an empty campground, took our choice
of spots on the point overlooking
the reservoir. Unrolled our kits,
strung up a hammock
to take advantage of the view,
argued over some incidental,
like weed or whiskey (why not both?),
all the while wondering where everyone else was.
We never looked at maps,
or read reviews, how could we know
a summer scirocco comes blowing through
like clockwork at cocktail hour,
that it would wreck our tent, pelt us
with grit? For awhile there we
were both blinded; I reached out
into the dust-batter swirl for your hand
any part of you to anchor to.
Touching nothing, I folded into myself,
and waited for the wind to die.
How perfect that in just a few months
we’d drift our separate ways,
finding it easy to slip into new lives
now that our pans had been scoured clean,
now that whatever we were meant to be
had been cooked all the way through.
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OK so I am officially a fan of your work.
” weed or whiskey (why not both?)”
Sent coffee snorting
and love love love the way you speak to the cleansing properties of wind and sand and time.
Glad coffee was all that you were snorting! Thanks for the feedback.
This meditation could drift into nostalgia-studded triteness but it doesn’t. It’s beautiful. So many moments.
I love: “I folded into myself and waited for the wind to die.”
Yeah I was worried it was too much. Glad you felt it didn’t go there.
You mix tone and image so well here. You compress this relationship into one campsite artfully.
Wow thanks, Shaun.
A recipe for disaster in your “cocktail hour,” “dust-batter swirl,” “folded into myself,” “pans scoured clean,” and “cooked all the way through.” Cakes are for celebrations, though. I love the way you declare the final product a success after all.
Thanks, Amy. Appreciate the feedback.
Loved the ending, took it in a direction I didn’t see coming
Thanks Mike.
This is so beautifully done Bill
Thanks, Arwen.
Your first stanza sets the scene for the perfect campsite, with a little foreshadowing of why no one else was there. The symbolism of the ‘dust-batter” leads us to your drift a part. I like how it is symbolic throughout this narrative.
Thanks Kaîmilani!
Living through dust storms here in NM…one yesterday obscured the road…I can appreciate your descriptions here.
But even more, I admire where you took the incident deeper.