Cliff Jumping Tanka
No timidity
allowed. You can’t hem and haw
at the edge or dwell
on that foaming maw below
gnashing rocks for teeth. Just leap.
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No timidity
allowed. You can’t hem and haw
at the edge or dwell
on that foaming maw below
gnashing rocks for teeth. Just leap.
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I love the in-rhyme of “hem and haw/…/that foaming maw”
Frightened me and I was just reading it on a page!
Well-crafted!
The first and last two words are a poem in themselves that are colored in artfully through the rest of your poem:
No timidity
Just leap
I’ll make this one my mantra next time I’m waffling
Great flow and imagery here. The “just leap” has me feeling courageous!
Love the “just leap” — I need to keep those words front and center.
Nice internal rhyme, and line breaks that catch the leap.
Fantastic, Chelsie! Those internal rhymes are icing on the cake.
Wonderdul!! I jumped with you.
Great movement and word choices.
Even this woman, who inches into water, jumped with you in this poem!