Dream Song 1
I dream again, twisty ride
car sliding, my sleeping foot
frantic, rooting for the brake
my children curl in the backseat
car sliding, my sleeping foot
road like a Swedish steeple
my children curl in the backseat
I am rain falling
road like a Swedish steeple
shining asphalt, bald tires
I am rain falling
cold on a golden field, ablaze
shining asphalt, bald tires
fear shackled
cold on a golden field, ablaze
I’m hiccuping: Please-God-Please
fear shackled
I dream again, twisty ride
I’m hiccuping: Please-God-Please
frantic, rooting for the brake
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Nice, Elaine! The pantoum works well with the content, too.
Thanks, Nancy 🙂
Love the lines you used…one day, Elaine I will try a Pantoum– you drew them so beautifully!
Hi Pam–
In case it is of interest:
There’s a handy pantoum generator tool online that is free, http://jacobjans.com/pantoum.html
it is a macro designed to insert the repeating lines in place for you, moving them as you add or subtract stanzas. A cheat, I suppose, but it makes pantoum-writing super fun to try. I usually start on paper and then fine-tune on the pantoum generator. Just make sure to copy and paste it out (I’ve accidentally lost a few.)