Evening Carcade
After work, the very air outside went still
and hefted the bag inside–listened to clatter.
From my car, out of breath, I drove for hours
waiting for the call to come. It never did.
In the weaning of the sun, sky edged orange
and the streetlight flecked on–a reminder
of time’s passing arc. That tomorrow would come
bright as anything and reset the sky over–
shoulder the waiting for just one more day.
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I love the image of a weaning sun!
Thank you, Katrina!
The images juxtapose well to create the emotions here.
Thanks, Greg!
first I noticed the “c” sounds in “carcade,” “clatter,” “car,” “call,” “come, and “arc,” but my favorite element is the image of the sky shouldering your waiting
Thank you, Dr. Bedetti!
Shaun – Well, I’m curious as to the “task.” Has some oninous overtones (but I just finished watching a crime show!). Love “I sat in my own murmur” and the idea of “resetting” the sky.
I can totally see that reading, but I promise–just innocuous chores made more burdensome. :p Thanks, Sylvia!
And I wondered about that call which never came — it adds to the tension of the piece in a nice way.
Thanks, Bill. I was wondering if I left a little bit too much out here, but it’s a hard balancing sometimes
Another powerful poem. I don’t know what the narrator is putting in the dumpster, but I like that I don’t know. Brings a bit of mystery to it but also relatable as a reader.
Thank you! I do like knowing with what exists outside of the poem for me but letting the reader bring that in with their own possibilities too.