Fat Cats (Dizain)
Last call at the joint down the street
regulars push away from the bar
I’ve got headphones on, my Friday night retreat,
playing pinball, a planet-less star.
These are days I’ll examine from afar
and think what a waste, what a lack
of imagination, if only I could take time back
stow it in reserve for some future use,
a museum, a movie, instead of this track,
no free game, a life down the chute.
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A-BUH-A-BUHBUH-(OOOOO)!
CUH-CUH-UUU-CUH-UUU!
DIZZAYN!
Love it!
Packed tight and wrapped.
That ! I heard it
“no free game”
“playing pinball, a planet-less star.”
The entire poem engages, but that line just sings!
Ten lines can get really the job done!
I love the imagery and music here: “playing pinball, a planet-less star./These are days I’ll examine from afar”
Has a Billy Joel feel to it. Who
among us hasn’t closed a joint some night in our lives. Tight and well written, Buddy.
I really like these structured poems you are doing this year, Bill. Showing off some different skills! The mundane setting and simple actions belie a deep existential despair in this poem. ‘A planet-less star’ is such a clever line.
Thanks, Jeremy. I thought I’d stretch myself this LPM by doing forms. Won’t be every day. But most days. I appreciate the read.
Another wonderful dizain! I love the phrase, “Fat Cats,” and this poem delivered well!
intimate invite into this poem with:
Last call at the joint down the street
Sometimes a silver ball just wants to jump the track, ring the bells, make the lights flash. Love it.
“if only I could take time back
stow it in reserve for some future use”
are my sentiments, too