Field Report of Breathing
Feel the Apple Store: more than wet—
even the glass seems to sweat,
condensation curl like slow script
down its spine.
Shuffle through automatic doors.
Wear your O₂ like a necessary ghost,
tank small, insistent across your shoulder
like a vestment. Hear your breath,
a mechanical psalm.
Carry your body’s hitch,
its visible machine
among many sleek brethren.
White walls thrum with youth.
The fluorescent cold a respite
of sorts, tables slick as bone.
The aluminum children
tap screens like monks
illuminating texts. Sweat
through cotton, cannula
cling—plastic taste like a tongue depressor,
Texture in your nose
a hard warning.
Recall the ability to stand
long enough to browse.
Watch a Genius blink, tap fast
on a tablet-sized grief.
Hear a man
cough into his sleeve.
Catch another
spit low hate at the manager.
A woman lingers in summer wool,
fretting.
You want to go home, too–to return
to its familiar walls, the smell of smoke,
where just one breath turns so easily
into another without this tender tether.
So lay your boss’s QR code
on the counter—warm
as fresh eggs.
A child’s scream–PLEASE!
So watch a receipt unspool
like a scroll or banner.
Say Thank you.
You can leave into the heat.
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From title to ending period, I just love this poem. All the moving parts of this poem
are well oiled. I loved “condensation curl like slow script down its spine.”/”hear your breath, a mechanical psalm.” /”tap fast on a tablet-sized grief.” Great write!
Thank you! Honestly I was unsure about this one!
Very ethereal image driven poem of normal life. Creative!
Thank you! It’s kinda a weird subject:p
This poem– and much of your writing this June– makes the familiar magical, ethereal, and yet keeps the tangible elements that help us stand right next to you in the moments you share.
Awesome piece.
Thank you! I think a better title might have been “Feeling Overwhelmed At the Apple Store” in hindsight though 😆
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Fresh egg QR code
They seem of different worlds!
The contrast of the medical items with the religious items in this poem intrigues me. Cannula, tongue depressor, O2 tank, vs psalm, vestment, griefs, scrolls. Opposite ends of the same spectrum… tools with very specific purposes, made to save lives.
A great read as always, Shaun
Thank you! I think I might have mixed too many things :p
Every sense comes alive—the taste of plastic, the cold gloss of tables, the heat outside. There’s a quiet ache in every line, a longing for ease that’s both physical and existential. That last “Thank you” hits hard.
Thank you, Dana!
Echo other comments. Brilliant writing.
Love:
“a mechanical psalm.”
“Carry your body’s hitch”
Adore the way emotion is specific to character:
“spit low hate at the manager.”
“A woman lingers in summer wool,
fretting.”
And this is just gut wrenching:
“where just one breath turns so easily
into another without this tender tether.”
Thank you, Pam. It was one of those days I should stayed home 🏡
especially love “tablet-sized grief,” “White walls thrum with youth,” and the “can” in “You can leave into the heat.”
Thank you so much!
Superb writing, Shaun. Rich, sensory images. What hits home today is: “ You want to go home, too–to return/. . ./where just one breath turns so easily.”
As a homebody it’s definitely a common thought for me. Thank you!