How Do You Feel About Your Body?
How Do You Feel About Your Body?
after David Huddle
Bird ankles too weak for ice skates bad left eye
not constructed for multiple births breasts as big
as tractor tires enlarged mole on the back of my neck
(I left my hair long to cover it) If I filled out
a citizen’s application for my body I’d write
sturdy worker bones tough feet for calluses
blisters bruises strains all-in-all good stock
I could speed on my Hi-Flyer like a mountain stream
snake sliding downhill no Big Macs, salmon
and Caesar salad my favorites two coffees w/heavy cream
indulge in Guinness and club crackers After a stroke
I’m more sloth than eagle I still sing off-key
hot shower trickle balance my aging body on the rail
16 thoughts on "How Do You Feel About Your Body?"
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Yes you do !
and this is craft !!!!!
It hits just the right note.
wonderful list, so very human and un-glossed. My fave: ” If I filled out / a citizen’s application for my body I’d write /
sturdy worker bones.”
I could speed on my Hi-Flyer like a mountain stream
snake sliding downhill — 🙂
love this.. could easily just.keep. going…
is there a name for this form? the double space call/response..
It’s modeled after a poem by David Huddle and it appears a broken sonnet in that it has 14 lines and a subtle twist the end which a sonnet needs. But almost people wouldn’t know this. I just tried to make it appear a little like his did down the page.
nice! visually reminds me of pianofourhands..
then my mind wanders to an image of you sprouting
a second set, to sing a song about all your body(s).
I love this poem! Well done.
Beautiful piece. I also love the way it moves throughout and the “If I filled out/a citizen’s application for my body”
Amazing poem: “breasts as big / as tractor tires”
the body:
young we’re living in it
now
we’re living with it
Love this poem.
Beautiful, vulnerable, honest, personal. I love it.
This is so good, Linda. And every reader can relate in their own way.
SO fantastic, every single word!
“I still sing off-key” catches me deep
Well done- vulnerable and loved the form.
Intrigued immediately by the title.
Loved every line. With some humorous assessing mixed in there! Love it.
Well done, Linda. My favorite line: I still sing off-key.