I Take Issue With Allen’s Premise
I’m sorry, Allen—
I need to feel the rhythm
like pounding on keys.
What does it matter if I create a sentence, or fracture line breaks?
My fingers still plunk
at the corner of my desk
so I don’t lose count.
Words, like intervals, sing across the page in time with heart’s metronome.
With heart’s metronome,
sing across the page in time,
words—like intervals.
So I don’t lose count, at the corner of my desk, my fingers still plunk.
Fracturing line breaks,
or creating a sentence,
what does it matter?
Like pounding on keys, I need to feel the rhythm, Allen—I’m sorry.
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Of course, you need to feel the rhythm, you songwriter-poet you! The repetition really works in this poem.
BTW, so sorry I had to miss Poet & Song last night! I hated missing Chuck, but I really needed my homegroup last night.
No need to apologize. I know you are dealing with a lot. Thanks so much for the comment. Seems I can’t write any syllabic without “playing piano” on my desk. 🙂
You are a master at this, Roberta!
A satisfying creation of structure and rhythms!
Agree with Ellen, “Of course, you need to feel the rhythm, you songwriter-poet you!”
You breathe rhythm!
Well done!
Love how you interspersed the haiku and the American Sentence. Wow!
Thanks for the comments! I am so behind in reading and enjoying everyone’s posts! Forgive me.
Write with your own metre. Conventions be damned.
We write poetry for the joy, not for the toil!
Love the rhythm of this, Roberta!