Invocation Under The Dollar General Sign
They say the body’s a temple. Mine’s more like
a used double-wide from that discount lot,
leaning slightly south where the cinderblocks
settled wrong. It makes sound
like a cat caught in the dryer vent.
Good bones, maybe. More a string
of prayer beads
knotted by a clumsy saint. It carries pain
like the culvert conducts spring rain–pools
in unexpected lows.
Today, I navigate a sea of linoleum,
past the Mexican grocery
to where I do
my laundry–choking
on the plumes and waves of fabric softener.
My lungs start singing soprano.
A teenager, limbs like fresh-cut saplings,
darts past, a blur of peach fuzz
and body spray.
My oxygen pump telegraphs
air, a message: Remember
agility? I laughed at it. Briefly.
air, a message: Remember
agility? I laughed at it. Briefly.
Salute the ache.
Old comrades.
The laundry attendant (name tag askew,
hair a dark thundercloud), peers over her specs.
She chuckles, a sound like gravel
in a coffee can.
“Bless your heart. Hang in there.”
I shuffle out, victor of the clean brief,
into the parking lot’s flooded asphalt.
My car waits, a dented chariot.
Getting in’s a contortionist act
performed
for an audience of bored crows
on the power line: a percussive
heft. The crows startle, fly off.
I crank the engine. It sputters, loyal,
as faded as the Dollar General sign.
Another small triumph
bought cheap, paid for in creaks
and credit.
Temple? Nah. But it’s mine.
The fluorescent lights know
exactly where they can stick
their cheerful hum.
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So many dang good phrases and images, Shaun.
Thank you, Joseph!
I love this. So descriptive. Oh and that Title! <3
Thank you so much, Wendy!
Wow! The characters, the sensations, the message!
So much to adore here. I love how the teen brought to mind a fruit tree, and another figure had that stormy/thundercloud hair.
Thank you.
Thank you, Tabitha! I think this is my longest poem ever honestly!
Whew! Those opening lines. The poem as a whole is brilliant, but I love how the end comes right back to appreciating that used double-wide from that discount lot.
Thank you so much, H.A! That double wide is about all I got 😛
“But it’s mine.” — the acceptance in that line means everything. Really nice work, Shaun.
Thanks, Bill! I wanted to try extending the narrative a little bit here and am glad the core rang through!
nevertheless, a body “knotted by a clumsy saint” is sacred. Even if the last line disavows the notion of the body as a temple, the title tells me the poem is a prayer and contributes to the tension
Thank you! I wanted to think about what a curmudgeonly prayer might be when I was drafting this 😛
This a good example of how language can make a poem come alive. Great descriptions! The “dented chariot,” “victor of the clean brief” and hair like a dark
thundercloud. So much character is this poem.
Thank you, Linda! 💛
Great line–“More a string
of prayer beads
knotted by a clumsy saint.”
Thank you, Roberta!
Niiiiiiice line here.
“(name tag askew,/
hair a dark thundercloud)”
Concision and metered it strikes and lands.
I love this poem entirely, confessional and humor balanced and ends just leaving me hopeful
Thanks, Coleman! I write a lot of sadder or more nostalgic poems and I wanted to go for something that could be a little funny! 😛
Your first two lines, contrast between a temple and a double wide, is stunning. Vulnerable and humorous.
Love: But it’s mine.
Thank you so much, Pam!
Your poems are a constant delight – full of delicious language and heartsome life.
More a string
of prayer beads
knotted by a clumsy saint – oh, yes!
Thank you so much, Sylvia! 💛
I like the themes of acceptance and endurance in this piece, as well as the dry, self-deprecating humor. It was well-written and played like a short film in my head. Thanks for sharing, Shaun!
Thank you so much!
Shaun, this poem is full of great metaphors and lines. I especially liked (and you guess?): More a string /of prayer beads/knotted by a clumsy saint.
Thank you, Greg! I appreciate it!
This is my yearly comment in praise of your poetry. I read every one, sometimes twice. Fantastic work
Thank you so much for your kind words, Kris. I appreciate your writing, reading, and commenting!
So many wonderful lines and imagery, like, “My lungs start singing soprano,” but it was the emotional tug that I felt and embraced most, line after line, to the last stanza of self-love and “where they can stick / their cheerful hum.”
Thank you so much, Michele!
Your poems are always a wonder. Thank you for them.
Thank you for your kind words, Karen!