lines
she took twelve lines of daybreak observations, writ behind
condensation-impressionistic view, and chose the brightest one —
scoops of orange sherbet swim among green croaks
she searched the page for a hint of coveted metaphor —
tiny globs of rainbow-road ice cream– first pops
of zinnias? candy? no. yet i hunger.
she scanned the lines. is there a theme?
i imagine these eye-ear delights echo-gliding
today on stratus clouds o’er bluegrasses,
o’er sages. over all poaceae. in soothing breezes.
she scanned again. ramblings. what might a reader want?
perhaps the silent part.
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Not sure why but I had a wonderful feeling of walking with with Mary Oliver while I was reading your poem.
I really like your squiggles and the spaces between then are wonderful to.
I love the metapoetic elements of this poem. It’s an interesting perspective on image and line.
i’m not 100% sure what coleman means, but i think i like your ‘squiggles’ too.. 🙂
and that ‘soothing breeze’ is perfectly placed.. helps to draw out the breath after those missing v’s
Oh
what the poet goes through
(what might a reader want?)
it ain’t easy