losing hope
shattering inside
shards fly in all directions
wall goes up for protection
answered “fine,” when asked how i’m doing
live my life like i’m dying to live
how to forgive myself
(yes, the person i was)
when i let your fingers slip from my hand
your nails raking desperately
across my heart
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evocative ending: “raking . . . / across my heart”
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A heartbreaking poem, visually shown through the loss of grammar, punctuation, and rules. The imagery is strong; great word choice: shattering, shards, wall, protection, forgive, raking. I like the juxtaposition of “live my life like i’m dying to live” – notes of irony and grief, said with rhythm.
I feel the hopelessness (apt title) from the poem, but perhaps more subtly, I feel the guilt, shame, and regret weighing heavily in the heart. Visceral and gut-wrenching to feel the “nails raking desperately / across my heart”. Sliced like an old wound.
Another great poem. Thanks for sharing, L!
My poem is honored by your perceptive comments. You took the time to read it closely, providing sensitive insights on its entirety. Thankful for your encouragement and for being part of Lexpomo community. With deep gratitude to you, C.A.