Machine and Moon and Me
Hiss-pull, hiss-pull—
the machine breathes slow,
a steady rhythm I’ve come
to know better than my own pulse.
It ticks above the green thrifted chair,
moving past the quiet dark.
Outside, a dog barks once.
Oak roots twist and grip the congrete
ditch that runs deep beside the neighbor’s yard.
Blinds stay shut, but I catch
the streetlamp’s low silver spill
across my pillowcase. Porch moths
batter the glass,
wings fragile secrets.
I crack the window just enough—
enough for the slow
insistence of moths and moonlight
to slip inside this small room.
This body has learned a different kind of place—
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Such a good, hypnotic, and cinematic poem, Shaun!
Honest, revealing and as usual wise.
Thanks so much, Linda. I appreciate you.
Thank you, Bud!
I know that hiss-pull too 😉
Hypnotic was the right word.
“Slow/ insistence of moths and moonlight” 💙
Thanks, Joseph! 💛
I love how the rhythm is like the white noise of the Machine and lulls you towards peace even with necessary coldness. My favorite line is I catch
the streetlamp’s low silver spill
across my pillowcase.
Low silver spill… love the exhale of those words together.
Thank you, Dana!
This is alive.
4th stanza !!
You are helping us learn to see.
Thanks, Coleman! This poem actually started off as a villanelle
but it was so terrible–
This poem reads smoothly down the page.
“Porch moths
batter the glass,
wings fragile secrets.”
The perfect description!
Thank you so much! I have a love/hate relationship with those moths!
Description takes you right into the experience. Great work!
Thanks so much, Mike!
A mesmerizing piece of writing! I love the detail of “outside, a dog barks once.”– it reminds the reader of the space this poem is occupying! Love it!
Thanks, Winter Dawn! I appreciate your perspective and learn from it.
Beautiful descriptions, Shaun. So very nice.
Thank you so much, Bill! This one was a bit of a struggle!
the oak roots may be twisting and gripping and the moths may be battering, but the poem is soothing and restoring
Thank you! I’m glad it got to that place!
excellent descriptions that do teach us how to see and feel like coleman said.
Thank you so much, Linda!
captures rhythmic sounds of machine well: “Hiss-pull, hiss-pull—”
powerful, raw, and honest.
love how this poet, who once breathed in the gods of literature into his boyhood space, breathes with powerful language all that is around and in him.
courage and wisedom: This body has learned a different kind of place—
Thank you, Pam. I really appreciate your kind words. I hear the sound all day and when it’s the only sound at night, it’s weirdly percussive.
I love how the machine has its own rhythm, but you set up the human/world rhythm so beautifully!
I crack the window just enough—
enough for the slow
insistence of moths and moonlight
to slip inside this small room.
The words “slow/insistence” here just mesmerize me!!!
Thank you for your kind words, Sylvia!
I love the “streetlamp’s low silver spill…” and the porch moth “wings fragile secrets.”
Thank you, Rosemarie!
Wonderful, Shaun. The details are well-chosen and the flow is like buttah.
Thank you, Kevin! I could do with a little more buttah. 😛
Oh! “wings’ fragile secrets” – what a beautiful phrase.
That willingness to let in what wouldn’t necessarily be let in really comes through, and your last line nails it. A very unique expression from a very unique poet! Thank you
Thanks so much, E.E!
Such beautiful sounds! I love the onomatopoeia start and rhythmic flow that leads us to the heart of it all.
Thanks, Michele! This was supposed to be a villanelle with that sound but I do not a Dylan make!
The last line sums up the learned experience–which has crafted such beautiful lines! Bravo!
Thank you so much, Greg!
First, the rhythm had me. I actually tried thinking about the hiss-pull. And then was tapping my right fist on the table as I read. But then, I was sort of pleasantly horrified by letting it all in. By the way the speaker opens the window enough to embrace nature in a way I would not. And then I knew I was somewhere else. Something wholly different was happening.
Thank you taking the time to sit with the poem and sharing where it took you, Thrower.
A masterclass in evoking atmosphere and internal experience through meticulous observation. GREAT WRITE!
Thank you so much, jst!