Maiden, Maid, Made
White display china
and unmarked carpet,
earned with pruned fingers
and disinfectant-dappled shirts,
also earn the comment
“she’s a maid”
and laughter.
It rings as
unimportant,
comical,
but to her
it rings
and rings
and rings.
She hears the scars,
whispering then weeping,
wilting under the low pitch
of laughter and the unspoken,
conspicuous hiss of
subservient,
submissive,
subpar.
Perhaps
it’s par for the course,
but she assumed
spouse and sister
suggested respect
instead of served it.
Promotions
and growing apart,
grasped with glee
and indifference,
later grasp a reconnecting,
rementioning of the comment
and reawakened laughter.
It rings as
unmattering,
inoffensive,
but to her
it rings
and rings
and rings.
They do not sense
the quips she carries,
actions she ignores,
concepts she accepts,
all she withers
beneath,
behind,
below.
Though
the laughter fades,
like dust on a bookcase,
a thought swims, settles back,
and she wonders
if she is a maid
of her making.
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The short lines, repeating phrases, and images all combine to paint a subtle portrait–beautiful!
That’s so kind — thank you! I’m glad you liked it all.
Liked the content and form of this poem
Last lines are great!
Aw, thank you so much, Linda!
Your words and short lines kept me reading – just couldn’t stop!
Happy you liked it! I appreciate you reading and commenting.
As if the wordplay in the title weren’t enough, witty language fills your poem! I especially enjoyed “subservient/submissive/subpar.” Everything about this is amazing!
Thanks for being so kind as always, Katrina! It means a lot.
Wow. The poem speaks obliquely but oh so clearly
That’s an amazing description for the poem! And thank you for reading 🙂
You’ve really crafted your words well for this poem. The repetition and connected words are fantastic.
That means a lot coming from you! I’m glad you liked it.