Oracle in Gold-Plated Aluminum
Those summers, the field blurred thick
through the heat-haze. Our double-wide
like a castle on high hill—not quite
drywall thin enough to hear screaming
lawnmower outside. The same thick me
reading Bullfinch’s in a dusty jacket.
Gods bloomed in the trailer’s close air.
Not like the Jesus on memaw’s wall, gaunt
and holy, but figures full
with fault and fire. I traced their wars
on my hand-me-down waterbed,
the sticky vinyl envelope cool with water
against my own big body.
Cassandra came last. Priestess
choked on truth no one wanted.
Her voice lived in my room,
the wheeze of the weedwhacker
the Kentucky sun a furnace. I read
about a prophetess
in a prophecy-proof world.
Now, years later, the field’s sold off.
The news scrolls like a never-ending
Styx. We have felt the world go frantic
for years–an ozone tang
before the storm, the flicker of recognition
of every porch myth, deep as limestone.
The gods are gone, or never came.
Just us. Outside,
the moon is said to be red
and I do not watch it or the fireflies
from the dark—Inside,
I am the closed room, the screen door
covered over by PVC siding and walled
in. I trace the old lines of these myths,
mouth their tales of wanting. Do you feel
it too? The phantom ache
it too? The phantom ache
where wings might have been?
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Wow. What a poem, Shaun. Maybe my favorite of yours ever. Love the juxtaposition of the ancient myths and the present Kentucky, lawn mowers and weed whackers. And those last lines, just wonderful.
Thank you, Bill! I appreciate your reading. Maybe I should just wrap it up for this June! 😛
Agree with Bill.
This is truly something special.
Sense of place, and voice, contrast between that hopeful boy and the current clime. So many lines that literally sing. Bravo, man.
Thanks, Joseph! As someone who used to only write fiction, unbaring so much is a little uncomfortable but it’s also worth it too.
This is it, Shaun.
I will return to this one
and expect to see it in journals, anthologies, and classrooms.
Masterful.
Wow, Bud! Thank you!
Love the detail of body, trailer, and outside noises delicious with:
“Gods bloomed in the trailer’s close air
figures full/with fault and fire.”
Thank you, Pam! I was trying to get down how alien and electric it felt to read Greek mythology for the first time as a preteen who grew up in the Pentacostal church.
Oh my oh may, Shaun–so good, from “but figures full/
with fault and fire” to “The gods are gone, or never came. /
Just us.” This is perfectly formed and so visually and aurally exquiste. (Could you tell I like it?!)
Thank you so much, Greg! I am glad you found what I was going for!
Love the question at the end.
Thanks, Chelsie! It was a last minute move from earlier in the poem !
Yes!
To everything about this
I can’t i just can’t put one placement above. This is where something like place and feel
explode.
Perfect. That’s all.
Thank you so much for your kind reading, Coleman!
This poem is rich with image, emotion, and honesty. Those last two lines land perfectly!
Thank you! Those were a late move and I am glad they work for you, too!
I appreciate the way the ending shifts away from the first person to include the reader in its allusion to Icarus, perhaps
Thanks, Dr. Bedetti! I was going for Icarus and think maybe I need to hit that a bit harder somehow earlier!
Hi Shaun, i was reading this right along, smoothly, and thinking while reading, “wow, i sure would like a coffee/chat with this poet…And, then, (you might recall my Missing poem w/its lost legs screaming w/phantom pain)…and then BANG! Your last lines got me right thru my heart to hit my soul !! I will deal with my own pain…but the idea of an angel having the kind of pain from a ‘lost’ wing…Tears…can’t think of that…you touched me…
Sally, thank you. Your comment means more than I can say. Thank you for trusting me with that, and for seeing the hidden in the poem.
ozone tang – this wasn’t the only bit, but the rolling richness of language in that poem!
Thanks so much, Manny. I appreciate you!
This haunting poem is filled with so much yearning and tenderness. So many lines and images took my breath away, A perfect ending.
Thank you so much, Karen! I appreciate your reading.