Passive Pantoum
For me, it’s easier to repeat than to change–
in the hospital, I ordered the same lunch each day–
and it’s not like I lack variety in taste. My range
is broad as anything else, like the horizon over the lake in May.
In the hospital, I ordered the same lunch each day–
a broiled piece of chicken. Some potatoes with salt-free salt
tastes fine, as broad as anything else. Like the horizon over the lake in May,
it’s easy to be a placid thing no one could fault.
A broiled piece of chicken and potatoes with salt-free salt
for lunch is fine. So is the apartment I’ve shared for years–
it’s easy to be a placid thing. No one could fault
me for being content. I guess different is just another fear.
The same lunch is fine. So is the apartment I’ve shared for years,
for me. It’s easier to repeat than to change
being content. I guess different is just another fear,
and it’s not like I lack variety in taste, my range.
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The form really supports the message.
I love the pantoum form — you use it well here, building gradually a picture of the speaker’s state of mind.
So good Shaun. Never heard of the form but like it. And the sentiment is great – different is just another fear. I can relate. Thanks.
You truly are a master of this form. It’s so much fun to read, and I love watching the story build.
World building done very well. Love – “it’s easy to be a placid thing.” Absolutely!
Agree with the others…taught me what a pantomime is!
Good lines you chose for this pantoum.
oops left out 2 words in my reply. Here is the complete feedback:
Good lines you chose for this pantoum to repeat!
Shaun, so skillfully done! Really works!
Well done!