Potemkin
The line that neatly ties the bow
He was ninety-three
“He lived a good, long life”
Neatly packaged and sealed
But not every long life is good
Nor is every good life a long one
The thread loosens
My brother hated visiting the home
It smelled of death and piss, he said
In the security of my silence
I agreed
He was the brave one, for saying so
How we all felt
If we couldn’t bear the smell
The presence of death
How could it have been
To share every moment with it?
Do those years count
Toward a good, long life?
The ribbon has lost its shape
All that’s left now is the box
No need to pick it up
To examine and know
That it’s empty
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This one hits home.
“Do those years count
Toward a good, long life?”
We still wonder the same thing about our grands.
Thank you for sharing this.
Yes, it does hit home.
I can’t separate those last 6 mos of my dad’s life from the 55 years that went before, or the 29 or so I got with him.
Deeply felt.
Gosh, I had to reread the last stanza; it is so stark and beautiful with the “ribbon has lost its shape” image rounding out the poem. Wonderful poem.
This is a perfect example of titles adding to the poem. =) <3
Austin this such a powerful poem. I worked in a nursing home for a few years and your poem reminded me well of the smell and overall feeling of it.