Primordial Daydream
Somewhere below the surface, a stillness.
Wild waves smoothed to tug-and-sway, sun’s
acid brilliance filtered through layers of light-bending
blue, ripening from tart lemon to liquid honey. She slips
beneath the heaving expanse. Somewhere above her,
summer sky carries the calls of birds and children, the beach
crowded. But as she descends, all air-bound commotion is swallowed
down the salt throat of the sea, water weight like a blanket lulling, breath
buoyant in the hold of the lungs, her long hair flowing in time
with the seagrass. Leaving the others behind, her body in the close
grip of saltwater, there is only dance follower and lead. She resurfaces,
floats with ears submerged, water lapping at face edges. Closing her eyes, she tunes
herself to the boundless calm that whispers in voiceless sighs around her, welling up
from some fathomless keep below the ocean floor, from the very core of the earth. And
in this moment, she could almost swear she is the first sentient life to ever burst into being.
from some fathomless keep below the ocean floor, from the very core of the earth. And
in this moment, she could almost swear she is the first sentient life to ever burst into being.
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I like the way the structure visually builds out as the poem does!
Love “the salt throat of the sea” and “long hair flowing in time
with the seagrass.” Really nice how the structure of the poem widens with her thoughts and feelings. Lovely!
Wow! I love your vivid descriptions!
I like the mood of this primordial daydream and how the narrator could be the first sentiment life to ever burst into existence.
So many great descriptions! I enjoyed “water weight like a blanket lulling,/breath
buoyant in the hold of the lungs”
“Long hair flowing in time with the seagrass” I love that feeling you have captured.
Such perfect descriptions! The flow of the sun’s acid brilliance to tart lemon to liquid honey is so accurate for the progression of time/light on the ocean.
Your description of the half submerged face has me picturing a painting I bought forever ago and now I have to go find it. . .
I like the sounds of this
Venus emerging from the sea…