Pyramid
Twenty eight oil cans:
I’d wipe each down and stack them
one by one, offset,
so that the can above
was supported by two below,
first a row of seven, then a row of six,
then five, and four, and so on
until I placed the last can in the apex position.
A break to smoke, or fill up with leaded,
wash a windshield, carefully uncork
a scalding radiator cap,
draw a dipstick from its slender sheath,
or pace the lanes like a sheriff on patrol,
the heavy coin changer hanging from my belt,
the big bell’s double-ring
with each car that came and went
like the bell telling boxers when to fight
and when to quit,
admiring through the plate glass window
this monument
to big oil and minimum wage,
chevrons all aligned, checkmarks
on the ledger of my dull but earnest labor:
I thought that it would last forever.
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Oh, I love this subject matter. A poem of work. (We don’t have enough of them.) Your lines build suspense. The last two verse surprised me!
nice work here!
Again, your details bring us right into the scene. I can picture every image and action clearly.
Bill, I love this homage so much. The heavy coin changer, the double-bell, the stacked merchandise- this made me heartsick with nostalgia for a time – give me a 1979 Lincoln Town car to drive into this little station.
Yes ! Takes me back to the 1900’s
And like liz, I’d like to pull in to the station as well.
Put me in that china white,bone stock 69 camaro.
This poem stacked liked the drums, culminating in distractions and surprise – you never thought it would end. I could feel the cold metallic clanging shut of the old, glass pop bottle vending machines – they weren’t here, but I remembered. 🖤
the ending recalls “Ozymandias” for me
I really enjoyed the meditative lyric quality of the writing and images here
I read your poems for the realism aspect. I always feel like I know YOU better after reading. Thanks for sharing Bill!
Excellent, Bill (as always). You draw me with your description: a detail then detail then detail, until I am hooked. Nothing fancy. But who are you writing about? Sounds a like a service station attendant back when there were such beings — before both our times? Good job.
I’m old enough to have been a gas monkey back in the day at a Chevron station. Started working there when I was 16, even got to drive the wrecker on occasion, after I mastered three on a tree!
Excellent, Bill. I remember those pyramids, built with such care. Now you’re lucky if there’s windshield cleaner and a squeegee. I agree with Linda: we need more poems about work!
This one ends with a tone and a footfall that reminds me of another of yours I just read about ‘hating our lives’ I believe. That’s a great consistency of voice.
The moment pulls you in and is very vivid. I think back, my oil cans were hay stacks and feed bags.