Something Bad
Bonny boy waits at the base of the hill
for his sister to join him, it’s the day
they go to the cemetery with quill-
dipped colors to write missives on the graves.
He kicks rocks, nursing a nagging concern,
she’d never be late on Day of the Dead,
something must be keeping her, a rough turn
of her ankle, or she’s taken to bed.
Morning sighs, the sun high, birds go hide
deep in the thick of bold bushes and trees
he should be sweating it’s so hot outside,
there’s a chill in the air, a bone cold breeze,
something bad has happened to sister dear,
their time together over, it appears.
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This reads like to prelude to a horror film and I say that I say that in the best-possible way. 🤪 Great use of rhyme.
Yes, an ominous prelude poem that allows us to finish the story!
this intriguing somewhat gothic sonnet with a ballad-like tone is making me want a resolution to the mystery of sister’s non-appearance
Haunting and mysterious. The rhyme adds to the tension.
I love the mystery in this!
scary started here for me:
“cemetery with quill-
dipped colors to write missives on the graves.”
You prove the simple AB rhyme scheme still packs a lot of punch, Bill. I’m waiting with that boy at the base of the hill, just is worried as he is.
Oh sweet jesus!
So much skill in this I can’t.
You know so yeah!
“they go to the cemetery with quill-
dipped colors to write missives on the graves”
Agree with Gaby , a gothic ballad with a mystery
So, a goth side to the poet emerges! Well crafted and chilling.
Sinister in a fairy tale sort of way. The Brothers Grimm would love it.
Beautiful imagery! That “bone cold breeze” caused me to shudder. Such an eerie story. . . .
There’s that fabulist, Grimm thread that runs through this piece. I love how it reads out loud with the rhyme not taking it over–balanced and chilling.