The Cloud I’ve Been Under
It’s when I plant my feet
that the street beneath me
starts to shift.
It’s when I laugh out loud
that the cloud I’ve been under
starts to lift.
It’s when I’m feeling old
that I’m told I’m returning
to my youth.
It’s when I start to cry
that the lie I’ve been telling
is the truth.
It’s when I start dying
that I’m trying to tell you
that I’m done.
It’s when I start living
that I’m giving you a sign
that I’ve won.
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the rhyme here sounds like a scratched/cracked LP.
nice work.
The juxtaposition of the changes incited by action is great!
I like the victory made by leaps.
love the form, its rhythm, the title
Simple form full of complex ideas!
Love the internal rhyming and tightness of this poem!