To the Woman Bathing Herself Beside the Thornton’s
The last thing you should have to endure
is a gawker interrupting your modest toilet
of Aquafina water and corpse gray rag.
For all I know, you’d been scrounging,
begging, dodging unspeakable horrors,
to afford this opportunity to remove
hard weeks of sweat and grime.
I suspect on so hot an afternoon
the water felt good-silver cool,
the breeze luxurious,
your spa as fine as any Roman bath.
You stood partly in shadow
partly in light strong enough
to reveal the worry lines of addiction
around your eyes, the nub
of a chin where teeth had been,
our Venus of Clifton Street,
working that damp rag
over crusted neck and pits.
I confess, I saw more than I should,
and upon that look,
I hissed Nice,
and became someone I didn’t like.
10 thoughts on "To the Woman Bathing Herself Beside the Thornton’s"
Leave a Reply
You must be logged in to post a comment.
Wow, I didn’t see the turn at the end coming as the beginning reads so compassionately. It really bites. Love the descriptions showing she’s an addict — “Venus of Clifton Street.”
Such an interesting illumination of this scene. Like Chelsie, didn’t expect the ending and appreciate how it bookends the sentiment at the beginning of the poem.
gas station adam
rag as apple
she as eve-
and even has a hiss!
masterful!
can’t explain it exactly.. but i like the feeling of this-
like listening with you eyes. (?)
Nailed it. 👍🏼 it was ekphrastic poetry combined with a hammer at the end that comes from left field.
Not only did you see her
You saw yourself.
This is art.
What Jim said! This is another great poem from you. I expect we’ll get more.
I think the address in the title and throughout the poem redeems the voyeurism beautifully
Well done- a poet’s observation and an introspection!
Definitely did not see that ending coming. It floored me.
Great ending. I confess, I didn’t like this speaker at the use of Venus of Clifton St. though I get what you meant. I appreciate the honesty of the volta.