Visiting Hours
Memaw once saw it move low
near the gray-beat barn
and it’s newer, tan door:
just a mean barn cat.
She split bologna into a chipped saucer
by the hay bales.
Come on now, mean thing, she’d call,
her voice frayed over the yard,
like when she’d holler to my papaw.
The yellow eyes watched,
wild and gold-coined,
not the mousing kind.
not the mousing kind.
That bobcat ate ghost-quick,
then vanished in the beam’s old wood,
a wildness.
I didn’t know about mistaken bodies,
then. Hers and mine,
of this ache and certain surplus,
a landscape doctors mapped
with like comorbidity.
Now, the wildcat’s long gone
from the barn. Memaw, too,
in a nicer room
where she thinks is her home,
helping the nurses. Always caregiving.
Her mind a creekbed I cannot delve.
In that place, the barn door’s gray. The wild
is fed. We sit together underneath the carport,
tethered by the ghost of bologna grease.
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Your descriptions are so fresh and vivid! I love “her voice frayed over the yard” and the bobcat’s “wild and gold-coined” eyes. I can see this all so clearly in my mind’s eye.
Thank you, Chelsie!
Agree with Chelsie. I love how the cat “vanished in the beam’s old wood” the way all the images seep into each other
Thank you! That bobcat got a lot of free meals for a while
Storytelling school.
Blown away.
Reading it again
And the last two stanza
Oh.
“where she thinks is her home,/
helping the nurses. Always caregiving”
Thanks, Coleman. That line describes her as well as I can.
Very nice, Shaun. I like the idea of caregiving, even when the cat doesn’t linger. but eats ghost-quick. And your word choice is scrumptious!
Thank you Nancy!
*always caregiving* – it’s a fantastic portrait you’ve shown us
Thanks, Arwen. 💛
love the call to story:
Memaw once saw it
and her frank voice in: Come on now, mean thing, she’d call
and love:
gray-beat barn
her voice frayed over the yard
Her mind a creekbed I cannot delve.
And, wowsers! the last stanza.
Brilliant, Shaun!
Thanks, Pam. She did wonder why that cat was so mean 😅
such a wonderful glimpse at your memaw with such vivid details and word choice
Thank you, Linda!
So many lines/images that took my breath away, such as “Her mind a creekbed I cannot delve.” Beautiful, vulnerable, & haunting at the same time. Your last three stanzas did me in.
Thank you so much, Karen!
You provide a wonderful tribute to your Memaw (and the bobcat). All the feels at the end.
Thank you, Bud!
The buildup and power of “Always caregiving./ Her mind a creekbed I cannot delve” is absolutely amazing. Such depth, as always.
Thanks so much, Maira!