Twilight Soon
That purple-ing right as the sun sets—
right as that last magenta is just going.
I picture the colors changing minimal
and flat like a modern Broadway show
of that childhood field: cardboard
standees of a barn, a yellow brick house,
trees on casters—
tobacco and corn in neat rows.
I can try to place us there like characters.
The fireflies flicker like special effects.
Noises of bugs playing their sleepy orchestra.
15 thoughts on "Twilight Soon"
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And right now, right here we are.
The colors. Beautiful Shaun.
As yoda said ” there is no try.”
Did.
Love it.
Shaun, this feels just like a postcard!
I love the descriptors, especially colours!
What a beautiful description of environment. Love it.
Love the colors…can see it changing…
Shew! “The fireflies flicker like special effects./Noises of bugs playing their sleepy orchestra.”
Shaun, this is simply beautiful – the sounds, the pictures yyou create – all of it!
Shaun, you painted a beautiful picture.
I love the colors. You are a Van Gogh of poetry.
Lovely. You capture the moment well.
Beautiful imagery and striking colors! I love the ending best, the line: “I can try to place us there like characters.” With special effects. (Really, really great line!)
Oh, wow. Shaun, this is a total photograph of this moment. What beautiful imagery:
“I picture the colors changing minimal
and flat like a modern Broadway show
of that childhood field: cardboard
standees of a barn, a yellow brick house,
trees on casters—”
I also love the way you include “purple-ing” in that first line. Yes!
Way to set a scene! Glad I was in the audience for this one!
Title pulled me into the moment. Loved the lyricism and strong imagery: “Noises of bugs playing their sleepy orchestra”
Beautiful painting of words. I’m there watching the show.
Such a cool conceit!