A Tanka Before Moving
Slight flicker of wind
wakens, Soft cooing doves fade
fast, rising sun-sear.
Transitions are natural.
How many more transitions?
Slight flicker of wind
wakens, Soft cooing doves fade
fast, rising sun-sear.
Transitions are natural.
How many more transitions?
-soft cooing doves fade-
A lovely line & imagery.
I love,”rising sun-sear.”
I love how you turned the tanka at “fast, rising sun-sear”. It was an immediate change from the gentleness of lines 1 and 2. The capping lines were beautiful. What a wonderful tanka.