Avian Romance
My darling, just across the way
a blue pond shimmers, rippling waters clear
near tulips blooming as they dance and sway,
a paradise to rear our goslings dear.
Stretch not your thund’rous wings up to the sky,
for drizzling showers hinder painted flight.
Instead, let’s wade with webbed feet spry
upon the rushing road, courageous as a knight
who raises pointed lance against a wick-
ed foe. My love, be sure to step in time
with raindrops’ pitter patter onto slick-
ened streams of gray. The Chevrolet’s grand chime
and pickup truck’s great horn are nothing more
than serenades to ferry us to our safe shore.
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Lovely – the idea and the poem!
Thank you! I hardly write sonnets, so I’m glad to know you liked it!
Your abab cdcd efef gg is how to write a sonnet. The iambic pentameter has been labelled as the perfect English writing and speech.
Such beautiful imagery in this poem! Great job!
love how the Chevrolet and pickup truck figure into the traditional form and tone
Thank you! I liked the idea of using specific car types.
Thank you so much! This means a lot coming from you! 😊
Sorry Abby, thatwas supposed to be a direct reply😅
I love your diction here! It’s so perfectly fit together to give a whimsical feel that combines old and modern wording.
Thank you for your kind words! You’re such a talented writer, so I’m glad you liked my poem! 😄
This is delightful!
Thank you!
The enjambment between stanzas is a nice touch
Thank you! I wanted to bend traditional sonnet rules a bit, so I’m glad it worked!
Elegant style, language that resonates with eyes and ears.
Thank you, I’m glad you think so!
I like the journey from “my darling” to “my love” to “our safe shore”–a nice snapshot of a love gone right. Nicely done, Katrina.
Thank you, Laura! I thought it would be neat to explore love through the eyes of a goose and their mate. I’m glad you enjoyed it!