Bite
one who shadows
like darkness clawing night
can not comprehend
healing a hallowed soul
in surrendered grace—
without drawing blood
or sacrificing himself
consumed by shaded bite
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Powerful: “in surrendered grace—/without drawing blood”
Thank you, Pam! 💜
I agree with Pam, powerful! “Cannot comprehend healing a hallowed soul.”
Thanks, John!
the verbs “clawing” and “hallowed” work well to establish the tension
Thank you, Gaby!
Love love the couplets. Great rhythm. And “consumed by shaded bite”!
Thanks, Bill! Glad you felt the rhythm here.
Healing a hallowed soul…really nice
Thank you, Rebecca! That line took me a little time to craft. I am glad you like it. Thanks for reading!
Haunting and filled with great sounds.
Thank you, Nancy. Yes, haunting for sure. Thanks for reading!
Every word counts here. Evocative tone lingers in my mind. Enviable craft, H.A.
Thank you, L.! Such a kind response. Thank you for reading!
Oh, so many layers to this one! Love “surrendered grace.” Vampire meets the good soul. (I shouldn’t have watched that scary movie last night!)
Oh, my!! Watch out for those vampires. Be sure not to let them in. Glad you see so much in this small poem. 💜 Thank you, Sylvia!
A portrait of a person whose inner darkness makes them believe intimacy must involve wounding. If I had a dollar…
You’d be a wealthy man, Jeremy. Thanks for reading!
loved, “like darkness clawing night” Something unsettling about this piece–or haunting, as mentioned above. Thought provoking.
Thank you, Eric. I appreciate your kind feedback. Thank you for reading!