Broken-Backed
“L’important ce n’est pas lieu où on se trouve,
C’est l’état d’esprit dans lequel on est.”
– French Proverb
An earring hides somewhere (missing) in my car—
trace of silver & ice just as tiny as you.
Its presence is constant; its voice is pulsar.
That morning (after night) you messaged from afar;
I went searching within, shifting contents accrued
for the earring that hid somewhere (missing) in my car
under seatbacks & uprights, round both blankets & bars,
til one shimmered with sun—just the one, not the two
(still feeling its presence, voice constant & pulsar).
The one that I found murmurs quiet memoirs
from the dresser by my bed in sepia hues:
missing moments once hidden right there in my car—
heat of bodies & pressure, creating feldspar
between two (or just one), an alchemical brew,
that is missing; an earring hiding there in my car.
Its back at an angle, a broken au revoir
fingers can’t bend to shape—heart can’t help but construe
how your presence—inconstant—was a choice & pulsar.
I wish I could give you more than this escritoire—
a fragment of value beyond what has ensued
or an earring (all you’re missing) somewhere in my car
but you’re silent—I’m silent—& some things simply are
& some aren’t & cannot find hope to pull through.
So an earring is hiding—I am missing—& my car
whispers presence & constance; love’s voice yet pulsar.
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Hard to find earrings!
Right?? Thank you for reading, Les
i love how stacked up and compounding this gets
Thank you, Dustin
My Belgium friend made two corrections: escritoire is archaic (like me). Should be ‘Ecritoire.
And in the epigraph, missing a Le. Should read:
“L’important ce n’est pas le lieu où on se trouve,
C’est l’état d’esprit dans lequel on est.”
Would you call this a broken-form villanelle? The image of a lost earring kind of fits the theme of the poem and the additional tercets coupled with the repetition bring the reader to the feeling of something lost in the way that when you lose something you keep going back to the same place even though you’ve already looked there. I am so impressed by this poem, Joseph!
Thank you, Linda ☺️
I do tend to break and play with the repeated lines always. The extra stanza in there—it happened by accident initially and then I left it for the reason you said (love how they write themselves, right??). I argued with my Belgian friend that, even though the spelling of the one word IS absolutely archaic, that, too, felt “on point” (particularly WHERE and why it was placed). This piece wasn’t for her (it was for me, again, but that’s a side point to the side point lol—if it were for or to someone other than just me, she majored in French Language and Lit. They slip into her pieces unintentionally 😞). Even that it begged to be a villanelle parallels.
Thank you for your read and analysis as always!
I wholeheartedly agree with the above comments and would just add that this poem is the work of masterful mind and hand.
Phenomenal use of form.
Sheesh, thank you Coleman.
You guys are killin’ me 😂💙
Wow wow wow! Fantastic villanelleish poem. Great work.
Villainish? What? 😂😉
Thank you too, Kevin!
Beautiful piece of writing. Love the recurring lines and images.
Thank you, Bill!
So glad it resonated with you guys and gals!
Spectacular, Joseph. The way you bend and break form is mesmerizing!
☺️ I honestly thought it was crap when I hastily posted it this morning. And it’s been a rough day (emotionally, for no apparent reason more than any of the last 7 weeks or so). Thank you. You guys are great 😭
This is just so good to read, as all your work is. So much to unpack and dissect stemming from such a simple premise as a missing earring. Wonderful work.
Thank you, brother!
I owe this one to H.A. Her earring poem made me remember this incident and the one in the drawer on top of my dresser. And that I hadn’t taken it back to her the last two dates (we forgot). And then that was it for dates. And I assume the second is down inside my seats somewhere inaccessible still.
Big hugs.