day dream #32
you drank caffeine and took a nap in the sun,
then the suns rays began to bother you some
there wasn’t 5 positive reactions to every negative one
where there were two now there was one,
aren’t nightmares where you lose someone?
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storm clouds rolling into
nice sense of mystery here.
I enjoy the similar sounds at the end of each stanza; repetition makes this poem all the more cryptic, like an unsoothing daydream.
I enjoy poems that end with a question. They hang with me most of the day! Nicely done.
This is the kind of poem that will really stick with you!
I really enjoyed this poem, great use of rhythm and rhyme