Infernus
(dis)
belief
fills my soul—
infernus &
indistinguishable discontent, yet
blue shadowed hue in the earth’s twilight wedge
serves to remind
me that I
can still
trust
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H.A., a strong message in a short poem. It is commendable that you can still find trust amidst hellish and indistinguishable circumstances. I enjoy reading your verse!
Thanks, John. I wish I could take credit for still finding trust, but it’s only a narrator. I’m merely the writer. Thank you for always reading and commenting with such care!
Thank goodness for that blue shadowed hue! You’ve said so much in these few words – nice work!
Indeed! Many thanks for that gorgeous shadowed hue. Thank you for reading and leaving such kind comments, Nancy!
Nice, especially the ending!
Thanks, Kevin!
Enjoy your creativity and profound poems!
Thank you, Linda! So glad you enjoyed this one. Thank you for your kind words. 💜
H. A. – You’ve done it again!
I love that “blue shadowed hue in the earth’s twilight wedge” overshadows all the other lines and allows you to feed on it’s hue and gain back trust.
Thank you, Sylvia! 💜 It’s funny, I didn’t even realize that the line overshadowed the others. Pure coincidence! Thank you for reading and for giving me way more credit than I deserve.
Your subconcious took the wheel. LoL And that’s more than okay.
Thank you, E.E.! 💜
Profound. Few words give a lot of room to think. Your choice of words adds to a meaningful poem.
Thank you, Virginia! I appreciate that you see the poem as a place with room to think. 💜
Shew!: “blue shadowed hue in the earth’s twilight wedge”
Thank you, Pam! Yeah, that line happened all by itself. I claim no knowledge or memory of intending it to read that way. I wrote this one a few different ways. I am glad this version sticks for you and others. 💜
Concise and so well-crafted. Issues of trust, so relatable. Love the form. Thank you, H.A.
Thank you, l.! I am glad you enjoyed this. The tetractys forms are fun to try.
I think you know by now, I’m one of those weirdos who wants every word to earn its keep in a poem. (I don’t always nail this, but I keep working at it. LoL) BINGO! You hit it. And I too love the long line — what it says as well as how it stands out in the poem. That line earns its place in the poem. Well done!
That means a great deal to me, E.E.! Thank you for reading and leaving such generous feedback. 💜
Masterful, again of the form. I love everything about this. From the parentheses the kicker of ampersand ….the wedge.
And thats just , the message.
I will say what said about Bill’s
Every word pays its own rent in this poem.
Thank you, Coleman! It means a lot that you see such great elements in this poem. Many thanks!
Sometimes it is best to look outward. Nice write, H.A!
Thanks, Jeremy! Yes, looking outward helps tremendously.