Lake Effect
Lake so smooth I thought of you,
how your bare thigh held my head
those easy going days and nights
before things turned bad.
Lake so smooth I thought of you
rolling joints on the pink glass table,
pink like lips, pink like waking
from the sleep of deep concussion.
Lake so smooth I thought of you,
body of your golden Gibson,
wake like string across the chasm
of the whirl of memory.
Lake so smooth I thought of you,
slick like butter on the plate,
your blonde hair on the pillowcase,
my fingers dipped in water.
12 thoughts on "Lake Effect"
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I love the title
Because it made me think of winters cold and then the poem thaws my mind. Great use of repetitive line.
Cool ending.
I was worried a little the title might be misleading, it may be.
What a mesmerising poem. The repeating line of “lake so smooth” is especially hypnotic & effective. . Some golden lines here too. Very tight & satisfying to read.
lovely poem Bill! gets convoluted as she goes.
butter slick plates, and string like wakes…
so much good stuff here
I like the title and the combined effect of “lake so smooth” as a gentle rocking reminder of all these smooth things – glass tables, bare thighs, a golden gibson guitar, just great.
Ah, what good memories. This has that bittersweet feeling of memories from a past that can never be regained. Very tenderly written Bill, good one!
Also really like how you used the anaphora technique with “lake so smooth I thought of you”
Love the rhythm of this poem, the repeating lines, the undertow of “before things turned bad.” This poem screams to be set to music.
love the sound effects, the repetition, the precise images
Especially love the play on the guitar shape/ shape of a woman’s body, and the slick like butter line. Dreamy and gliding poem.
Love this one! These lines are beautiful memories and I imagined each one so clearly. Tastefully done!