Looking for Whitetail Deer
in the quickening woods of Jackson County,
I pressed my big body into the soil, a book
in hand as my camouflaged papaw scoped
his eye for deer. I learned to remain still,
quiet, and put my book away on occasion
to notice his noticing–the subtleties between
a fir branch’s tense sway and then its jostle,
the sound of a quiet thing on sure feet walking.
His eye locked just above the rifle. I didn’t keen
to the heft of the gun in my hands, one eye closed
and the other peering. I stayed to books
and noticing things, like how he brought salt
for the deer and noticed their runs–it seemed
he’d followed them steady for many, many years.
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Wonderful poem. These two consciousnesses lying side by side, each acute in their own way. Bringing the salt for the deer adds something ineffable to this portrait.
” I stayed to books and noticing things, like how he brought salt “
Thanks, Kevin. He was a real outdoorsman and cared about the animals.
You’ve long had a poet’s heart.
Thanks, Carrie! I appreciate that.
This poem made me appreciate you more assuming your are the speaker. It’s a great poem.
Thank you, Linda! I am the speaker in most of my poems right now–or at least a more eloquent version of myself in verse.
I love this. Learning to be still, learning to notice. You demonstrate your skill at both in this poem.
Thank you, Gwyneth! He probably would have liked me to move more!
A beautiful portrait of the “pawpaw” — and I love:
“a fir branch’s tense sway and then its jostle,”
Thanks, Greg! I always think of him around this time of year
This is so intimate. I feel like I have crept up upon this scene and am watching from behind the trees.
Thank you, Sylvia!
What a lovely study of a man and his papaw.
“notice his noticing” and showed us your notices. Very nice.
I really appreciate it. I’ll always be in awe of him and his layers.
Love all the noticing, and the sounds pushing up against the stillness.
Thank you, Karen!
The life of a sharp observer
Thank you, Jim!
Wow, this is exactly me and my dad when I was a kid going hunting with him. With a book, ha! I can hear all the soft sounds and remember the different types of “noticing” we were doing. I’m enjoying your poems!
Thank you, Jasmine! I didn’t like the hunting part, but I did like the rest of it.
I stayed to books
and noticing things,
Great lines
Thank you, Melva!
Your poems last year were a great read last year and they continue to be so this year. Thank you for your writing. This was a great piece.
Right back at you, and thank you for your kind words, Philip!