Oh, 1-2-3…
He died down in the everbearing roses.
-Maxine Kumin, “Woodchucks”
The beloved bedraggled mutt is all fringe and tongue,
mottled as the floor of a patch of forest. She knows
from the smells (green lawn clippings, chlorinated
hosewater, some woodsmoke in the air, and a tinge
of metallic blood) where the vole mother lay, bit
by lawnmower. Like the ache of a primal thing,
she knows exactly where the body lies. She follows
its scent, a blur of khaki camouflage zipping
across the complex grounds, away from her ward
who follows, shouting her name. But the smell
and the pounding impact of her feet on asphalt…
then feet on grass again, then shaken darting vole.
It’s not the dog’s fault–she was programmed to run,
to fit her neat teeth delicate around vole necks.
Just like the vole, in its way, knew to slacken
in those teeth–
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Beautiful and present.
Love Maxine Kumin! Your little ditty is packed with everything we know.
we are what we are. exquisitely detailed in its empathy
Beautifully observed, and a lovely gracefulness in your sense of the line here.
“Like the ache of a primal thing”
Wonderful imagery and mood you create.
Great alliteration and consonance in this poem. I love the ending!
so much for the senses here, great work!
Dense with sensory imagery and meaning.
Witness to the nature of nature. I agree with Gaby – “We are what we are.” “All fringe and tongue” and “a blur of khaki camouflage zipping” some of my favorites. Love how you gave the dog the “delicate” attachment to vole. Ending is a beauty!
lovely, ending says it all
Mesmerized by the flow of this, and the thoughtfulness. Thanks for that moment.
Had me here:
The beloved bedraggled mutt is all fringe and tongue,
mottled as the floor of a patch of forest.
Love how we sense this through the beloved mutt’s senses:
smells (green lawn clippings, chlorinated
hosewater, some woodsmoke in the air, and a tinge
of metallic blood)
Beautifully woven story.
Fantastic ending to this one. Wonderful poem