Opiliones
You could smell the cold
through the closed door–
outside daythick and steamheat–
all stillness and need outside.
Two daddy long-legs succor
the cool, moist air from the door jamb
of my apartment,
their prehistoric bodies
also found in Scottish rock
from over four hundred million years ago,
and right here, too,
the alien wires of their many legs
and heads like spent erasers–
I resist my urge to crumple
their delicate frames away, avert
my eyes at the ghost
the negative of their erect bodies make–
alone, I open that door,
heft the weight of my body
into my apartment’s cool envelope,
into its usual places.
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Love the second stanza. Especially:
and heads like spent erasers–
Thank you, Pam!
I really like the second.
And it’s neat how it turns away from that in the third.
‘ cool envelope ” is gooooood
Thank you, Coleman!
sooo good.
*unsolicited opinion/suggestion alert*
can you try to play with linebreaks on some of the longer lines? (don’t change a work tho 🙂 my eye wants to see this
long
and
skinny
working
its
way
down
the
page….
p.s. a quick googlesearch also calls opiliones ‘harvestmen’ a word i’m squirrling away in my notebook (thx)
and …. i’m such a sucker for anytime
a line starst with an ‘of’ –margin farleft..
the tip of my pen is buzzing with all those
ofs trapped in the middles.. 🙂
Love that idea–also harvestmen is def a great word– they were always grandaddy longlegs to me.
“the alien wires of their many legs
and heads like spent erasers–”
is just perfection, Shaun.
Thank you, Bill!
Enjoyed this poem. Perfect image of the steamy weather:
“outside daythick and steamheat” and loved these lines,
“the alien wires of their many legs
and heads like spent erasers”
and the ending image–that “cool envelope.”
Thanks so much, Karen!
Prehistoric bodies, alien wires of their many legs, heads like spent erasers. Love these fresh descriptions!
Thanks, Chelsie!
from top to bottom
Opiliones
is a work of nature.
absolutely love it
Thanks, Jim. I have to try and remember that they are and give them a little grace despite my instincts!
I like so much of this, Shaun – your inventive compound words, what I’ve learned about daddy long legs and the rock parallel to the cool envelope of your apartment.
Thanks so much, Nancy!
there’s room for everybody. love your sensibility, Shaun
Thank you so much, Dr. Bedetti!
Omg. The end and your connectivity of all things. You’re writing on another LEVEL
Thanks, Sam. I appreciate you. 💛
Opilione is a new word for me.
outside daythick and steamheat– my fav line.
Thank you, Melva Sue!