shell-ey the revelator *
yesterday a box turtle
looked up
at the man of dust
kept his neck stuck
all the way out
his red eyes
like air quotes
as if to say:
‘excuse me, sir
what’s all this about?’
with unhinged brows
in wild punctuation
the dusty man
discarded:
‘it’s twenty twenty four-
your kind
should know
by now’
then
he slid his neck halfway back
inside
his emphasis- a sluggish dash
in turtleish reply:
‘we’ve never really
had
to think like this
before-
even though
we’ve always had shells.
this
is
the first
its
felt so
endsome-
somehow.’
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the moral of the story : try to use (first person) ‘i’ (just a little) less in your poems…. before it’s too late…
other life exists…
* working title….
also thinking ‘ turtle to man- man to dust’
or ‘the turtle and the man of dust’
the Turtle speaks
volumes
I like it! The dialog feels Aesopian, or like the story of the frog and the scorpion. Your play on your name is delightful with a soupçon of biblical foreboding.
Your poems always give me so much to think about!
Love – with unhinged brows
in wild punctuation
Sluggish dash. 🙂 I agree w/ Sylvia about the unhinged brows in wild punctuation.
credit is yours.. picking at your machete whack, helped me unlock a new stage for punctuation 🙂
I love this, love being in the mind of a turtle, love the pace and space to ponder, it breathes beautifully
Any poem with a turtle as a character is good reading, and this poem does not disappoint. I’m rooting for that turtle. Nice writing, dustin.
Also got a fable feeling as Kevin commented and enjoyed the lines of dialogue which ended the piece. (Sorry I’ve been out of commission for days)
Wow, to both form and function.