Slewfoot Melts
You know he only calls when his body
wants–a deal you make. Believe him
when he gives so little of himself to you.
It’s all he has left in this modern age: a whiff
of smoke and the beast of him, horns gleaming
in halogen. It’s like the end of something,
in a way. So much mood and drama.
Maybe the candle wants to be winnowed
When you leave you both feel unredeemed.
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so much said in so little space – this is an intense poem that feels like it’s on fire. I especially like the ‘horns gleaming in halogen’ and the entire concept of the candle and winnowing down.
The large lumbering physical need, unrelenting- horns. The deal for physical- he gives so little. Wow!
Thank you, Alissa!
Thanks so much, Arwen!
from a bewitchery tale
you spin a poem
powerful & chilling
and make it your own
great
Thanks, Jim! These Slewfoot poems are definitely something else
You never really disappoint, Shaun. I love the voice of this poem. The idea of “unredemption” is compelling to me.
I really appreciate that. I’ve been trying a different voice with these Slewfoot poems
I’m finding that your poems always deliver, and this one is no exception. That ending line is definitely a keeper. The word “unredemption” speaks volumes.
Particularly liked the image in the lines:
a whiff
of smoke and the beast of him, horns gleaming
in halogen.
Thank you so much, Karen. I feel like I do some of my best writing for June and this space
I also love the sense and sound of “a whiff
of smoke and the beast of him, horns gleaming
in halogen.” That pearling wax is a heck of an image, too. You have such a way and voice, there’s no mistaking a Shaun Turner poem.
Thanks so much, Bill! I really appreciate your kind words and feedback this month
I loved the images you use and the continuation of slewfoot poems.